poetic yet again

Reminiscent of your dulcet voice,
Sweet inflection when you bid farewell for the night
While I - rummaging for the moon
Break the cosmos asunder -
To rule your heart, my vanity surrendered
You, with just a faint intonation of voice
Humble my entire enterprise.

(In this one I sound like the guy. So I would prefer the following modification :))

Reminiscent of your dulcet voice,
Sweet inflection when you bid farewell for the night
While I - venturing to acquire a mare's gait
And entice with Aphrodite's guise,
To rule your heart - relentlessly weave countless guiles
You, with just a faint intonation of voice
Humble my entire enterprise.